¡Hola! Por ahora estoy jugando el juego en español y aunque no lo he terminado, me está pareciendo muy entretenido. Los fondos son súper bonitos y las CG también <3
Pero en los diálogos he encontrado algunas faltas de ortografía que creo que vendría bien revisar. Por ejemplo, "porque" junto en una pregunta, o "tí" con tilde, "aparezido" en vez de aparecido, pequeños detalles así. Y esto ya creo que es algo más personal, pero quizás añadirle una transición con dissolve a los fondos cuando se hace una transición de un fondo a otro podría quedar más suave (como la transición que tienen los personajes al aparecer y desaparecer).
La parte del arte me parece fantástica, los personajes son bastante interesantes, y la música me parece muy bien elegida con la ambientación. Me lo estoy pasando muy bien jugando y tener tantas opciones de diálogo me parece genial para meter al jugador en la historia. (Sería una pasada poder elegir pronombres, pero creo que eso es más complejo programarlo en python).
Para ser un juego que está siendo desarrollado por una sola persona, es un trabajo increíble, y merece mucho la pena jugarlo. Estaré pendiente para las futuras actualizaciones <3
Hi! Yes, I've been slowly working on it even though I had to take a big break. It's still going to take a while but I plan on releasing a full game. Sorry for the inconvenience 🙏
A very promising game, and I love that it's a 17+.
It has charming BGs, cute CGs and inspiring soundtracks.
The story is pretty intriguing from the very beginning, and I have really enjoyed how the characters were portrayed (both main cast and npcs).
The thing I liked the most was having so much dialogue choices because it really helps with immersion in my opinion.
In the end the only detail I might have not being overly enthusiast about was having to choose how my mc looks like choosing from two identical pics, the only difference being one with fair and one with dark skin tone.
I think it would have been better to just have the ability to pick from basic textual options like eye color, hair color and length, skin color, maybe height (short, medium, tall) without having pics of the mc at all but that is just my personal preference (only because I really like a full immersion experience).
That said I am really looking forward to any future updates, so keep up the good work and congratulation in making so far a very enjoyable demo!
This game is so amazing! The artstyle, BG music and everything was great but the best part is that it's jam packed with content. The chapter itself I felt was a bit short but it was great. There were so many beautiful BGs, CGs and Sol is absolutely gorgeous and everything is so colourful and bright! I really liked that Sol was actually drawn instead of being just described as is the case in most VNs. The MC is nice and I like that you have the options to decide how you felt about your past and actually have a lot of choices that define your affection with the LIs without it being too obvious. The story was great too; the lore is built gradually instead of overwhelming you. As for the LIs, they seem to be quite intriguing but I can't pick a favorite yet!
As for the grammar and writing, for the most part it was fluent but there were a few errors here and there. Like in one place, there was a sentence "She said that putting a funny expression, rolling her eyes". Maybe saying "she put on a funny expression" or simply "she rolled her eyes while making a face" would have been more correct. Other than that there are a few spelling errors but for the most part it's fine. Anyway, I loved this and can't wait for the next chapter to be released!
About the spelling, English isn't my native language but I do try my best to not make many mistakes. I really appreciate the feedback though, I'll take it into account and try to fix those mistakes for the next update.
I'm glad to see you enjoyed the game despite this, hope you also enjoy the next chapter. Thank you for your comment 💕:)
Looking forward to playing this! Love that it's 17+ too, I can't find enough otomes out there that get spicy enough for me lol. Just finished chapter 1, definitely enjoyed it! Loving Gabriel.
Looks so interesting! The artstyle is gorgeous. And I love that it's 17+ coz it's hard to find games that are both story rich yet a bit mature. Looking forward to the whole game!
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¡Hola! Por ahora estoy jugando el juego en español y aunque no lo he terminado, me está pareciendo muy entretenido. Los fondos son súper bonitos y las CG también <3
Pero en los diálogos he encontrado algunas faltas de ortografía que creo que vendría bien revisar. Por ejemplo, "porque" junto en una pregunta, o "tí" con tilde, "aparezido" en vez de aparecido, pequeños detalles así. Y esto ya creo que es algo más personal, pero quizás añadirle una transición con dissolve a los fondos cuando se hace una transición de un fondo a otro podría quedar más suave (como la transición que tienen los personajes al aparecer y desaparecer).
La parte del arte me parece fantástica, los personajes son bastante interesantes, y la música me parece muy bien elegida con la ambientación. Me lo estoy pasando muy bien jugando y tener tantas opciones de diálogo me parece genial para meter al jugador en la historia. (Sería una pasada poder elegir pronombres, pero creo que eso es más complejo programarlo en python).
Para ser un juego que está siendo desarrollado por una sola persona, es un trabajo increíble, y merece mucho la pena jugarlo. Estaré pendiente para las futuras actualizaciones <3
Hey is this still being worked on?
Hi! Yes, I've been slowly working on it even though I had to take a big break. It's still going to take a while but I plan on releasing a full game. Sorry for the inconvenience 🙏
OH!!! HOW WONDERFUL YOU ARE!!! telling us directly that you're still dev'ing this wonderful game!
A very promising game, and I love that it's a 17+.
It has charming BGs, cute CGs and inspiring soundtracks.
The story is pretty intriguing from the very beginning, and I have really enjoyed how the characters were portrayed (both main cast and npcs).
The thing I liked the most was having so much dialogue choices because it really helps with immersion in my opinion.
In the end the only detail I might have not being overly enthusiast about was having to choose how my mc looks like choosing from two identical pics, the only difference being one with fair and one with dark skin tone.
I think it would have been better to just have the ability to pick from basic textual options like eye color, hair color and length, skin color, maybe height (short, medium, tall) without having pics of the mc at all but that is just my personal preference (only because I really like a full immersion experience).
That said I am really looking forward to any future updates, so keep up the good work and congratulation in making so far a very enjoyable demo!
Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate it.
This game is so amazing! The artstyle, BG music and everything was great but the best part is that it's jam packed with content. The chapter itself I felt was a bit short but it was great. There were so many beautiful BGs, CGs and Sol is absolutely gorgeous and everything is so colourful and bright! I really liked that Sol was actually drawn instead of being just described as is the case in most VNs. The MC is nice and I like that you have the options to decide how you felt about your past and actually have a lot of choices that define your affection with the LIs without it being too obvious. The story was great too; the lore is built gradually instead of overwhelming you. As for the LIs, they seem to be quite intriguing but I can't pick a favorite yet!
As for the grammar and writing, for the most part it was fluent but there were a few errors here and there. Like in one place, there was a sentence "She said that putting a funny expression, rolling her eyes". Maybe saying "she put on a funny expression" or simply "she rolled her eyes while making a face" would have been more correct. Other than that there are a few spelling errors but for the most part it's fine. Anyway, I loved this and can't wait for the next chapter to be released!
About the spelling, English isn't my native language but I do try my best to not make many mistakes. I really appreciate the feedback though, I'll take it into account and try to fix those mistakes for the next update.
I'm glad to see you enjoyed the game despite this, hope you also enjoy the next chapter. Thank you for your comment 💕:)
Looking forward to playing this! Love that it's 17+ too, I can't find enough otomes out there that get spicy enough for me lol. Just finished chapter 1, definitely enjoyed it! Loving Gabriel.
Loved the first chapter! All the LIs are adorable but Steel and Ryder own my heart <3 Can't wait to see what's next!
Oh, this looks really promising. The art is pretty. I like how the faces are being drawn, especially the eyes.
Looks so interesting! The artstyle is gorgeous. And I love that it's 17+ coz it's hard to find games that are both story rich yet a bit mature. Looking forward to the whole game!
Wow this looks so interesting and cool! I love the colors, so vibrant!